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I love this (too)! This flows in a way that I really like and feel - that rhythm.
Actually, after having just read/reread both, I say - this is a compliment! - that I prefer this one. It holds the same rhythm throughout the entire poem and I love the conclusion - so powerful, this really brings it all together and fits. Thank you for shar…
I love this (too)! This flows in a way that I really like and feel - that rhythm.
Actually, after having just read/reread both, I say - this is a compliment! - that I prefer this one. It holds the same rhythm throughout the entire poem and I love the conclusion - so powerful, this really brings it all together and fits. Thank you for sharing this!!
Especially thank you because I am someone who writes and also edits, and sometimes I wonder about the line between when to edit and write, and it's so helpful to see how others approach it!
Beautiful poems. Thank you for sharing!
Heh. Funny, isn't it? Sometimes, the first instinct is the right one. Maybe often or always. Live and learn. I like them both for different reasons and appreciate this community as a place to practice, share, and learn.